You've heard about the Monday Blues ❧✿❧ well this is Monday WRites ( musing on the definition here of rite, as any customary observance or practice eg the rite of afternoon tea ).
Welcome to Monday WRites #18, my poem today is a FOLD read more about this form here ; whats your mood today ❧✿❧ I invite you to link in with one of your WRites
CLOSING IN
the walls are closing in, closing in, closing in
if love is a given, an age old given, then why, oh why
this noise increasing, to a din, a din, a din
i fear; with a holy fear, a holy fear, holy fear
while the walls, keep closing in, closing in, closing in
wisdom threads on quiet wearied feet, beautiful feet,
and i know, yes i know, only truth in this war will win,
a battle waged, eons, eons ago; the prize - of souls
for this be comforted, he died, for redeeming of sin
so i wait in faith, for that grace, to completely unfold
yet, still, the walls are closing in, closing in, closing in
© gillena cox 2015
Will Link this to Tuesday Platform
I loved this form! Quite intriguing :D
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Lots of love,
Sanaa
Thanks for dropping in Sana'a
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Well written!
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Thanks Mascha
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Your repetition is very effective in creating a particular mood.
ReplyDeleteThanks for dropping in and for linking up Rosemary
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The claustrophobia of being shut in is really effective with repetions - yet there seems to be a savior
ReplyDeleteaha! thanks for your appreciation Bjorn
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The promise of hope within all that constriction, blooming like a flower in concrete - very nice feel to this.
ReplyDeletethanks for your appreciation Rommy
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You have maintained a heavy, pounding, heartbeat rhythm that suits your subject.
ReplyDeleteThanks Gemma
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Repetitions tend to keep one in contact with the feel of the poem more than otherwise. It keeps one in line with the mood without a guessing game playing at the back of the mind. Wonderful new form Gillena!
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Thanks Hank
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I can feel the pressure of the walls closing in, and the reaching for faith.......
ReplyDeleteThank you for your appreciation Sherry
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You have achieved a kind of reverberation here which is most unique.
ReplyDeletethank you for your appreciation Kerry
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Hi Gillena ~~ This one I can relate too. Just wonderful
ReplyDeleteDo you remember (perhaps you weren't even born when it was a hit) the old song, "They're coming to get me?" It went:
"They're coming to get me, coming to get me, coming to get me, coming to get me, coming to get me, coming to get me, coming to get me, coming to get me.
They're coming to get me thought I was ready for the fame that I've got
They've coming to get me thought I was ready for the fame but I'm not
more ..."
Professor Green - Coming To Get Me Lyrics | MetroLyrics
I liked that one, I could relate to it also
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p.s. I like the song, "Our God Reigns" a lot also.
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Thanks for your appreciation Jim
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I'd like to hear this one.
ReplyDeletethanks Marian. I will try to post it to one of those voice places
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