LAOTANG - BINDINGS
in the folds of
holds a
where the plum blossoms
look to a bird on a
For
A hope lies in the
Not to runaway but to stay
Keeping bound feet as pain to secure
In future generations
A
A freedom to think of each individual
Who should taste freedom to choose
What binds our feet and holds our heart
The ribbons of hope are
Take
Your mission to
Our freedom
Free to love
Bindings of our choice
LAOTANG - BINDINGS © gillena cox 2018
Revisit
6 April 2016
6 April 2015
April Six: Speaking in the Voice of Another
Prompted by Sherry Blue Sky; challenged: to write a poem in the voice of another: in this case, the voice of a woman living in feudal times, addressing her laotang,
this is interesting Gillena and I really like the strikethroughs, it reads like a visible redacted document, which has fallen into the liberated hands ...
ReplyDeleteand the more importantly, it speaks of the secrets shared within hearts willing to be bound beyond the constrictions of rules and codes of conduct and behaviour - to know within\without words, a code in almost silence, of how women can endure, persist, resist and eventually triumph.
how wonderful!
Thank you for your appreciation Willow
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"Free to choose bindings of our choice...." I love those closing lines. A wonderful response to the prompt, Gillena. Thanks for participating.
ReplyDeleteThank you for dropping in to read mine Sherry
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Reading it (simultaneously) with and without the crossings-out made me engage with it much more deeply. Interesting suggestion at the end!
ReplyDeleteThank you for your appreciation Rosemary
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Yes it is good to read this poem (letter) twice over to really get the feel and trust it conveys.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your appreciagion Robin
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The crossing outs play a most beautiful effect and emphasise upon the secret bond between Latongs in those times.💜
ReplyDeleteSuch a clever idea for this challenge, Gillena. The words that have been struck out add a whole new layer of meaning to the message.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your appreciation Kerry
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