CHRISTMAS LIGHTS
Twinkles off a thousand stars
in a dance of creation's tuning
meeting of spirit and mind twirl
like spiders to web design spinning
Seers of future molding realities
transports unseen to tangible form
music going on and on into distance
where upon tomorrow quells the storm
Of yesterday and further back
plugs them into the hope and care
of broken dreamers
piecing Christmas together as prayer
CHRISTMAS LIGHTS © gillena cox 2017
Writing Exercise (For Days of Little Time/ No Muse)
Karin's Challenge and rules [in a nutshell]: Take a letter, let a random word beginning with that letter arise in your mind, and then.... follow my other rules below!
(i) on your first draft, keep your pen (or typing digits) moving. (This is incredibly important if you are “making” yourself write.)
Also on this first draft: do not cross out; do not go back to fix; simply keep your pen (or fingers) moving ahead.
Keep the flow going for a certain span of time. Five minutes, ten minutes. It will be useful to set the time in advance. Do not make your time too long--ten minutes max
Now, you should have your first draft. Of course, you should feel free to revise it! You absolutely should revise it!
Keep in mind that the point of this prompt is really the exercise, not the particular theme.
So, first, remember that your piece does not need to have anything much to do with your letter or that word that came to mine. These are only jumping-off points.
Second, please try to use the technique to write something new,
MY EXERCISE GAVE ME THIS DRAFT:
When earth steals the twinkles off a thousand stars, and plugs them into the hopes and cares of broken dreamers, night mimics galaxies miles and unfathomable miles away, where only the seers of future molding realities like spinning spiders to web of design, transports the unseen to tangible form, thers is where at the edge of horizons meeting of spirit andmind twirl in adance of creations's tuning, the music going on and on far into the distace of yesterday and back to tomorrow
21 December 2014
Gorgeously light-filled. And I very much love your breathless, crescendoing draft , too!
ReplyDeleteThanks for dropping by Rosemary
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I love "a dance of creation's tuning" and "the hope and care of broken dreamers". So lovely.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your apprecition Sherry
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I particularly like the end, Gillena--the idea of piecing Christmas together as prayer. Lovely. (Sad!) Take care, k.
ReplyDeleteThanks Karin for droppibg in to read mine
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Your poem left me breathless, Gillena - it was like swooping in Santa's sleigh! I love the line:
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Thank you for your appreciation; Kim
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I agree, this is absolutely breathtaking! Especially love; "a dance of creation's tuning."❤️
ReplyDeleteThanks for your appreciation Sanaa
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Have a lovely Christmas Gillena! May it sparkle as brightly as the lights you describe.
ReplyDeleteMany Happy Returns Rommy
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Lovely writing ... Happy Holidays.
ReplyDeleteMany Happy Returns Helen
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Trådløs; Thank you for your appreciation
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Such a stunning poem, filled with light and prayer.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your appreciation Toni
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What a joy of CHristmas this was filled with... loved your draft as well... really nice
ReplyDeletethanks for dropping in Bjorn
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Love the idea of hundreds of stars twinkling cheer into the world, sing the song of tomorrow, soothing what's to come...
ReplyDeleteMay your Christmas be just as bright, Gillena.
Thank you Magaly, Many Happy Returns
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