you susurrate your daydreams in wave,
Atlantic - of frothy white secrets, they've
come and gone: galleon, caravel, carrack,
swivel your globes, dare to look back
sea grapes line borders of winding paths,
like swirling skirts of constraint to wrath,
ancestry frolics in face of watery heave,
sand bucket and spade steady play, perceive
sky colours in sea -
children at Manzanilla
building sandcastles
© gillena cox 2017
Midweek Motif ~ Ocean(s)
Susan's prompting
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“You must not lose faith in humanity. Humanity is like an ocean; if a few drops of the ocean are dirty, the ocean does not become dirty.” ― Mahatma Gandhi
Vivid imagery. I loved the way you ended the poem ~"children at Manzanilla
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How lovely to find the rhyme in the Haibun, setting the tone for ancient galleons and contemporary frolic in one swoop. The waters heave, children perceive ... Wonderful!
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Hand me a sand bucket, I'm ready to play!
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Somehow the term "swivel your globes" made me think of "shiver me timbers"! I love the word "sursurration" too. Your poetry always makes me think. Bravo
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Love the sea grapes lining the paths.
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There's something underneath this one to think about.
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Beautiful poem Gillena, it gave a sense of history of how many of the islands inhabitants descendants had come to the islands over the oceans.
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The waives of this rhyme
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like the galleons sailing while children build sandcastles and daydreams whisper like waves... sigh!!!
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What a joyful post.. :-)
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Images to behold - plain lovely.
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I agree with Rob that there's something underneath to think about. Like an ocean, this piece is beautiful, deep and can be interpreted in various ways. It is my favourite by you!
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Beautiful poem. It's no coincidence, then, that many of life's most romantic moments take place by the water :) Loved it, Gellina.
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This lifts my heart.
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