Saturday, December 19, 2015

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DUSK
Dusk came early
To greet a gibbous moon surely

Harsh orange splashes
Daubed the westerned ashes

Setting sun your ribbons of light
Has set the tone for night

Stylized blossoms patterned sheet
A lit firefly blinks there to greet

From an aged tree across the street
A mango fell with a thump

"finished reading?"

"I wasn't reading"
I said, i was waiting

We kissed goodnight
And dimmed the light
DUSK © gillena cox 2015


Written for Outlawyer's Take Two and Sing (We); the Weekend Mini-Challenge
Imaginary Garden With Real Toads

CHALLENGE: Think of a song--preferably a song of the season, a Christmas carol, Hanukah or Winter or truly any other song--and pick two consecutive words out of it. This can be any two words as long as they come one after the another. They do not have to be words particularly central to the song or the season and certainly your poem does not have to relate to the song or the season.
Use those two consecutive words as the spring board for your poem.

I chose 'your ribbons'
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Location: St James, Port of Spain, Trinidad and Tobago

12 comments:

  1. OutlawyerDecember 19, 2015 at 6:26 PM

    A charming and sweetly romantic poem, Gillena--the ribbons of the setting sun are easy to imagine here and love the sound of the falling mango. k.

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    1. Gillena CoxDecember 19, 2015 at 7:03 PM

      Thanks for a lovely prompt and dropping in to read my poem

      Much love...

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  2. Kerry O'ConnorDecember 20, 2015 at 1:42 AM

    You created the perfect mood for the loving conclusion.

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  3. brudbergDecember 20, 2015 at 2:36 AM

    If I would be were the weight of mangos could be heard it would be a glorious winter.

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    1. Gillena CoxDecember 20, 2015 at 5:27 AM

      Warm wishes dear Bjorn, i'm happy you dropped in to read mine

      much love...

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  4. JimDecember 20, 2015 at 5:10 PM

    Kris Kristofferson,
    "Take the ribbon from your hair,
    Shake it loose and let it fall,
    Layin' soft upon my skin.
    Like the shadows on the wall."

    Nice poem, ribbons can create excitement. I am not familiar with your song if it is "Cut your ribbons."
    ..

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    1. Gillena CoxDecember 21, 2015 at 6:46 PM

      Listen to the YouTube at the beginning of the post Jim
      Thanks for dropping by

      Much love...

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  5. Susie ClevengerDecember 21, 2015 at 1:03 AM

    Ah..romance. What a bit of fresh air.

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  6. MarianDecember 21, 2015 at 6:43 AM

    I wasn't reading, I was waiting. That is sooo sweet.

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