Wednesday, February 25, 2015

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INSIDE OUTSIDE WORD PLAY
inside outside
all around-side
breath life prana God force

inside outside
all around-side
thought spirit life creative essence

inside outside
all around-side
voice poetry word being

inside outside
all around-side
pause breathe suspend

inside outside
all around-side
gravity weight or less-ness

inside outside
all around-side
question answer real surreal

inside outside
all around-side
dream live move be

inside outside
all around-side
voice poetry word being

inside outside
all around-side
movement electricity dynamism

inside outside
all around-side
difference sameness earth sky

inside outside
all around-side
micro macro universe
© gillena cox


want to add a verse of your own at comments? sure, go ahead


Written in response to the prompt at Poetry Jam 'Inside/Outside Looking Out/In


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Location: Saint James, Port of Spain, Trinidad and Tobago

25 comments:

  1. Brian MillerFebruary 25, 2015 at 12:36 PM

    it is interesting how changing just that one line in each allows you to turn this gem a bit and explore all the facets....

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  2. UnknownFebruary 25, 2015 at 12:36 PM

    Nice! :)

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  3. PeggyFebruary 25, 2015 at 1:33 PM

    I like the form of this with the only changes being in the final lines. I can almost hear this as a song or chant. So many things inside and outside. Thanks for posting.

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    1. Gillena CoxFebruary 25, 2015 at 2:58 PM

      thank you for your appreciation Peggy

      much love...

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  4. alan1704February 25, 2015 at 2:09 PM

    Love this, Just one line changes everything, excellent

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  5. MaryFebruary 25, 2015 at 2:44 PM

    You have really worked with inside/outside in a unique way.

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  6. GabriellaFebruary 25, 2015 at 4:49 PM

    I like the way you use repetitions in your poem, Gillena.

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  7. UnknownFebruary 25, 2015 at 6:44 PM

    Deliciously mesmerizing use of linguistics :)

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  8. Sumana RoyFebruary 25, 2015 at 11:09 PM

    ah from an atom to the cosmos you have included everything in words...a great take on the prompt....inside / outside indeed and what a lovely rhythm to it....

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  9. GailFebruary 26, 2015 at 8:44 AM

    difference/sameness is an importance message.

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    1. Gillena CoxFebruary 26, 2015 at 11:22 AM

      thank you for your appreciation Gail

      much love...

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  10. Mary Ann PotterFebruary 27, 2015 at 9:01 PM

    I loved the almost hypnotic structure of this --- somehow both meditative and dramatic at the same time.

    Let me try an additional few lines at your invitation:

    inside outside
    all around-side
    word gift heart sense


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    1. Gillena CoxFebruary 28, 2015 at 6:59 AM

      (◕‿◕｡) ah; Mary Ann, Thanks for being such a good sport

      much love...

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  11. AnonymousFebruary 28, 2015 at 9:29 PM

    Beautiful poem! I like your technique of repetition. (from Jess, masterselftherapy.com)

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  12. Anita SabatMarch 1, 2015 at 4:49 AM

    Very interesting.
    So many points here! Micro, Macro - everything together thanks to God & His life prana :)

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    1. Gillena CoxMarch 1, 2015 at 6:05 AM

      thank you for your appreciation Anita

      much love...

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  13. Gillena CoxFebruary 25, 2019 at 7:56 AM

    Posted to the Facebook Group 'Seize The Poem' 25th February 2019

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