What if he blew and blew,
But the candle flame, true
To disobediance sort review;
And claiming freedom grew,
Brighter and brighter due,
To some magical new
Assignment, based on few
Rules to guide, and will to chew
On observances due
To maturity anew
© gillena cox 2026
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The rhyming works so well here! The boy and his freedom - loved it.
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I like your mono rhyme, Gillena. And the idea of a candle’s flame being disobedient, perhaps choosing its own assignments.
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Love the rhyming Gillena! A lot of thinking had gone into this write!
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Interesting question and response to the painting, Gillena. I love the way the ‘ooh’ of the end rhymes made my lips shape into a blowing shape as I read.
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The rhyming worked so well in the progression of light (or enlightenment)
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A great poem, Gillena. This was a very intriguing painting! I chose this one as well.
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Your mono rhyme echoes the defiant light. Nice one Gillena. 👏
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