Wednesday, July 22, 2015

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UNITY
He crept in like a recalcitrant lover,
Today's sunshine.

After all the mellifluous drumming,
Yesterday, on my tin roof,
She, that good ole nurturer,
Rain has gone her way

I feel his warmth, brush against my skin,
My eyes open, a sun kissed day.
Now sky is polished bright in optimal gleam.
Cloud puffs appear in a whimsical drift,
As if smiling at sun's trysts, of yesterday.

All is well, as well will be, like the union of
Night and day. Yin and yang.

A metallic sound, a tinkling of chimes,
Tried to call attention, but a raucous din,
Of passing birds, exclaimed to poet's ear,
To words and to wit.
© gillena cox 2015


Written in response to Susan's prompt today
Poets United Midweek Motif ~ Unity


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3WW #347

optimal polished metallic

36 comments:

  1. Now sky is polished bright in optimal gleam.
    Clouds puffs appear

    Such lovely images here.. Well penned :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  2. I loved the flow of the poem. Beautiful imagery! :)

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  3. I love the description of rain as "that old nurturer". How very true. We are feeling the lack of it in our part of the world these days.

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  4. Just like the melody of a song, the way we touch our world. May me think of sunny days by the sea. :)

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  6. Ah. Lovely.
    Pristine imagery. Beautifully penned. :-)
    -HA

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  7. Your poem is wondertul! I made me consider how much I appreciate the rain, the sun the whole day. Thank you Gillena.

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  8. How great this reads and I had to laugh with the ultimate line "To words and to wit" rather than "To wit and to woo"!

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    1. ay yes the persona returns to self at the end line, where the experience now that of the watcher the observer the poet, thanks for your appreciation Robin

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  9. truly lovely images here, whimsical in tone...beautifully penned, Gillena

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  10. All is well, as well will be, like the union of
    Night and day. Yin and yang.

    Yes that is the balancing theme in accentuating unity! Great ending Gillena!

    Hank

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  11. I love the changing weather - never to be certain what tomorrow will bring. A delightful read.
    Visit Keith's Ramblings!

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  12. This made me think of the masterful painting of the sky each day. Do the clouds get in a huff because they want to be placed differently, do the waters refuse to flow down stream, do the flowers refuse to open? Beautifully stated.

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  13. such beautiful imagery and flow....Nature humming the mantra all is well....

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  14. We've had a lot of rain lately. I would welcome sunshine the recalcitrant lover:)

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    1. LOL happy you dropped by Rall

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  15. That opening stanza is so well crafted. Great poem.

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  16. "A metallic sound, a tinkling of chimes,
    Tried to call attention, but a raucous din,
    Of passing birds, exclaimed to poet's ear,
    To words and to wit." Wow!!... you have wrapped it up so articulately. Such a melodious piece!
    Great imagery great composition...Gillena.

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  17. Yes, yin and yang - night and day: there is unity even in polar opposites.

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    1. Thanks for your appreciation Mary

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  18. Writing what's in us and around us is true unity!

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  19. Gillena,
    A unity of balance with weather and internal spirit makes for a happier self!!
    Eileen

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