Saturday, April 16, 2016

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[empty tomb - image from google dot com]


AWE OF RUINS
Days remaining, shadowed in doubtful failing light
Light regarding, shone on past to present line
Line curving, pointed in one dimensional vision
Vision slipping, honed of voices hushed to silence
Silence remaining, spoke of trust to harvest futures
Futures sustaining, carved of words good in hope
Hope retaining, bounded by fists refusing to open
Open cajoling, chanted thus the refrain of "sesame"
Sesame hearing, emptied a cave in morning sunlight
Sunlight blinding, chimed an end - beginning days
AWE OF RUINS © gillena cox 2016

Written for
In The Remains of This Month (April!)
Imaginary Garden With Real Toads
The Challenge by Outlawer: this 16th day of this crazy month of April write something that stems from this word--remains, remaining, remainder-- and I post pictures of sculptures I have taken or pieces that seem to me to be remains of some kind. (Feel free to do an ekphrastic poem and certainly to use your own pictures.)

AND

The Challenge by Sanaa:
On Popular Demand – Pour me drops of glorious sunshine [4]


AND

The Challenge by Magaly
Of Peculiar Fun and Me – Dark Poetry for the Cruellest Month, 2016 (Day 7)

32 comments:

  1. Open sesame are very clever words to have in one's repertoire. They work well here. Especially as a counterpoint to internal rhyme. Thanks. K.

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  2. I am very impressed by this never ending circle of a poem. Fear and hope running arm in arm :D XXX

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  3. Whistles!! I am absolutely enamored with this poem :D especially love these lines:

    Sesame hearing, emptied a cave in morning sunlight
    Sunlight blinding, chimed an end - beginning days

    Beautifully penned. Thank you so much for participating at Prompt Nights Gillena :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  4. every line unfolds like the petals of a flower beautifully...a magical journey to the sunshine...

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  5. Just reading the first two words of each line is a delight also. Wonderful work

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  7. I love how you let the line ends start again.. to let the form of the remains be embedded with your text

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    1. Thank you for your appreciation Bjorn

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  9. What a beat, Gillena. I feel like I should pick up my drum and start reciting your poem with hands and feet.

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  10. A beautiful write both in form and content. Enjoyed it so much.

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    1. Happy you dropped in to read mine Linda

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  11. Nicely done!

    I remember inventing this form way back in 1992 – only to discover years later that others had also invented it for themselves and someone had even given it an official name! (Though I have forgotten now what it's called.) :-D

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    1. Its just happened this way as I wrote, I realized some pattern of sorts was shaping itself in. I didn't know I was writing in any known form. Thanks for dropping by to read mine

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  12. Beautifully weaved. Loved reading it :)

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    1. Happy you dropped in to read mine Purba

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  13. How wonderful when the tomb opens..light floods in and there is hope of life again :)

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  14. Lush images and meanings abound. Beautiful!

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  15. Beautifully-penned! Love both the opening and ending, "days remaining...beginning days" there's some hopeful continuation here.

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  16. I like your title....there is something about ruins that really is awe-inspiring!!

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    1. Thank you for dropping by to read mine CC

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