Saturday, March 5, 2016

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SWAY
held between posts of rigidity,
grey areas of frieze meet fear
unlike the dancer's stance, swaying to,and fro;
stretched to a frizzled tension
neither a leaf fell nor a flower bloomed
in the dreaded zone of extreme indecision

jumped into the cold emerald of the ocean
a splash of pearled water awakened the soul
SWAY © gillena cox 2016


Written for Kerry's prompt at
Flash 55
Imaginary Garden With Real Toads
Challenged to write a piece of poetry or prose on a subject of your choice in precisely 55 WORDS
For the optional extra part of this challenge, include the word EXTREME/ EXTREMES in your title or the body of your work.


28 comments:

  1. Caught in the zone of extreme indecision.. I know I can relate to that. I like the images of the beautiful dancers, and the refreshing ocean.

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  2. I love these lines: "neither a leaf fell nor a flower bloomed
    in the dreaded zone of extreme indecision "---that zone is almost worse than making the wrong decision.....sometimes the relief that comes from finally making a decision, even the wrong one, is sometimes so welcome that one doesn't even care that it was the wrong decision!!

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  3. Sometimes it's only when we decide that we fall... i think I would be in extreme indecision and just linger... lovely take.

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  4. The way you have written this, the play of alliteration and flow of the verse, allows me to be a part of that sway. Beautiful.

    (Your Google site will not accept my Wordpress link so I had to use my defunct Google account. You will find me at http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com--sorry)

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  5. For me, your closing two lines are sensational!! Wonderful poem, Gillena! :)

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  6. Dancing on fences is tough business for the soul. Thank goodness for those "splash[es] of pearled water" that remind us where to go (and perhaps why). ♥

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  7. ha dreaded zone of indecision...been there...love the beautiful imagery of leaf and flower....

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  8. Well done. And I really like the sound of this, of "dancer's stance" "frieze" and "frizzled". This would be great read aloud.

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  9. The dancers dresses are the color of the sea...beautiful choice. Yes, I agree with Mary...This would be fabulous read out loud. Beautiful work!

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  10. I particularly love the 'cold emerald' and the 'pearled water'.

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  11. what a lovely depiction of movement ~

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  12. The zone of indecision one of my usual haunts! a very good way to frame it and a great way to escape. k.

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  13. Indecision is a terrible thing that makes us do crazy things. Your wording in this is stunning Gillena! Hugs!

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  14. This resonated with me ~~ a real fear of water would keep me from jumping in!!

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