Wednesday, February 25, 2015

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INSIDE OUTSIDE WORD PLAY
inside outside
all around-side
breath life prana God force

inside outside
all around-side
thought spirit life creative essence

inside outside
all around-side
voice poetry word being

inside outside
all around-side
pause breathe suspend

inside outside
all around-side
gravity weight or less-ness

inside outside
all around-side
question answer real surreal

inside outside
all around-side
dream live move be

inside outside
all around-side
voice poetry word being

inside outside
all around-side
movement electricity dynamism

inside outside
all around-side
difference sameness earth sky

inside outside
all around-side
micro macro universe
© gillena cox


want to add a verse of your own at comments? sure, go ahead


Written in response to the prompt at Poetry Jam 'Inside/Outside Looking Out/In


24 comments:

  1. it is interesting how changing just that one line in each allows you to turn this gem a bit and explore all the facets....

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    1. thanks for your appreciation Brian

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    1. happy you dropped in Daneshwari

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  3. I like the form of this with the only changes being in the final lines. I can almost hear this as a song or chant. So many things inside and outside. Thanks for posting.

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    1. thank you for your appreciation Peggy

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  4. Love this, Just one line changes everything, excellent

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  5. You have really worked with inside/outside in a unique way.

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  6. I like the way you use repetitions in your poem, Gillena.

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  7. Deliciously mesmerizing use of linguistics :)

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  8. ah from an atom to the cosmos you have included everything in words...a great take on the prompt....inside / outside indeed and what a lovely rhythm to it....

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    1. thanks for your appreciation Sumana

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  9. difference/sameness is an importance message.

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    1. thank you for your appreciation Gail

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  10. I loved the almost hypnotic structure of this --- somehow both meditative and dramatic at the same time.

    Let me try an additional few lines at your invitation:

    inside outside
    all around-side
    word gift heart sense


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    1. (◕‿◕。) ah; Mary Ann, Thanks for being such a good sport

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  11. Beautiful poem! I like your technique of repetition. (from Jess, masterselftherapy.com)

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    1. thanks for dropping in Jess

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  12. Very interesting.
    So many points here! Micro, Macro - everything together thanks to God & His life prana :)

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    1. thank you for your appreciation Anita

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