Friday, February 6, 2015

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image courtesy imaginary garden with real toads


IN LOVELY GRENADA
the lashes of my eyes flicker with thoughts of hot sand
hot sand scorching my mind to savour the insoles of feet
of feet trending from a skimpy bikini, its string tying my navel
tying my navel to the gentle rippling waves of Grand Anse
Grand Anse beach where i'll sit under a big hat
a big hat which hides my birth scar when i visit on vacation
© gillena cox



Written in response to 'Your Poetic Eye: Kumulipo'
Imaginary Garden With Real Toads
Ella's challenge for us today - to take the place where you were born-the state, the providence, the country-whatever you prefer and add the richness of this area to your poem.

“The “Kumulipo” is an old Hawaiian prayer chant that poetically describes the creation of the world. The word literally means “beginning-in-deep-darkness.” Here darkness doesn’t connote gloom and evil. Rather, it’s about the inscrutability of the embryonic state; the obscure chaos that reigns before germination.”

O ke au i kahuli wela ka honua
O ke au i kahuli lole ka lani
O ke au i kukaʻiaka ka la
O ke au o Makali'i ka po...


In English:

At the time when the earth became hot
At the time when the heavens turned about
At the time when the sun was darkened
To cause the moon to shine...

22 comments:

  1. What a beautiful place filled with warmth to gather inspiration.. wonderful.. Love the shade in the sun..

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  2. Thank you for your appreciation Bjorn

    much love...

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  3. You make me crave the sand, the sea and the soulful sun~

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  4. Happy you dropped in Ella

    much love...

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  5. I love the style that you used in this poem Gill. The repetition almost sounds lyrical because I swear I've heard a song whose lyrics use a similar form.

    How I would love to be on a beach in Cancun right now.

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  6. Your poem is so inviting.
    https://georgeplaceblog.wordpress.com/2015/02/06/conception-of-creation/

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  7. Thank you for your appreciation Kenn

    much love...

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  8. Thanks Debi and happy you left your link; i will stop over to read yours

    much love...

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  9. interesting device with the repetition
    and you make some unexpected turns

    nicely done

    cheers
    jzb

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  10. the earth can give so much inspiration

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  11. Thank you for your appreciation Jazz

    much love...

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  12. Happy you dropped in rosebud

    much love...

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  13. I love the echoing effect of the repetition - it cause the feel of waves rolling in as well. Great writing, Gillena!

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  14. Innovative repeats that keep us reined in on the setting. Lots of good scenes for inspiration. Great lines Gillena!

    Hank

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  15. Thank you for your appreciation Hannah

    much love...

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  16. Thank you for your appreciation Hank

    much love...

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  17. What a lovely place to find your muse

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  18. Happy you dropped in Susan

    much love...

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  19. You transported me from winter to the beach! Beautiful, Gillena.

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  20. Thanks for your appreciation Sherry

    much love...

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  21. All this on a "flicker". Love that.

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  22. Thank you for your appreciation Margaret

    Much love...

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