Saturday, June 4, 2016

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THE PUPPETEER AND HIS DOLL
Quiet light
Weight of feathers fluffed
You twirled me on the dance floor
Over and over.
Restating my swinging hips, carefully
Chimed to your clever
Puppet strings.
Then drew teardrops
On my sweet face
This heart of passion and earnest
beat; sadly, crumbled, fallen,
You let go of the strings!
Once you rocked my world.
THE PUPPETEER AND HIS DOLL © gillena cox 2016



Written for Flash 55
Challenge: to write a poem in 55 words. For the OPTIONAL EXTRA part of this challenge... choose a line or two of one of the saddest songs ever written as inspiration for your piece. The quotation itself will not fall within the parameters of the 55 words. Feel free to select words from a song featured in the clip, or from a personal favourite of your own which did not make the list.

Imaginary Garden With Real Toads
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17 comments:

  1. Kerry O'ConnorJune 5, 2016 at 1:42 AM

    Anyone who has felt used and bruised in a relationship must be able to relate to these sad lines.

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    1. Gillena CoxJune 5, 2016 at 7:08 AM

      Thanks for your appreciation Kerry

      Much love...

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  2. brudbergJune 5, 2016 at 2:15 AM

    The strings of being pulled until you are left is a wonderful and sad image of those relationships where one is being used.

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    1. Gillena CoxJune 5, 2016 at 7:10 AM

      Thanks for your appreciation Born

      Much love...

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  3. Debi SwimJune 5, 2016 at 8:36 AM

    "Once you rocked my world" and then we live to wonder why. This is a strong piece.

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    1. Gillena CoxJune 5, 2016 at 9:29 AM

      Thank you for your appreciation Debi

      much love...

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  4. RommyJune 5, 2016 at 9:13 AM

    The feeling of innocence betrayed comes through so strongly here.

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  5. OutlawyerJune 5, 2016 at 11:24 AM

    Terrible to feel that one has gone along with control and then still been dropped! But easy to relate to. Thanks. k .

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  6. annell4June 5, 2016 at 2:50 PM

    That was quit a challenge, and you met it perfectly!

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  7. HannahJune 5, 2016 at 6:34 PM

    This is an excellent song. Well done on the likening to the doll/puppet.

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  8. Other MaryJune 5, 2016 at 7:46 PM

    Yes, the puppet and puppeteer is an excellent metaphor for an unhealthy relationship.

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    1. Gillena CoxJune 5, 2016 at 11:20 PM

      Thanks for your appreciation Mary

      much love...

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  9. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJune 5, 2016 at 7:47 PM

    A wonderful metaphor, beautifully used.

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