Thursday, October 5, 2023

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Five Lines In A Copybook

On the first line i will write my name.

Teacher ask for date;

Day, month and year,

Followed by subject;

Maybe my address should be next.


Second line question:

What year is it?

To tell all will be to expose

My age,  though i have no qualms there.

My house is in the country.


Third line will be poetry,

Written with a capital P,

About yellow hills,

Painting a canvas of small words;

No 52 on the road where i live.


The secrets of line four of this Chaguanas girl,

Will soon be exposed to 

All in the class room,

Reading aloud to some snickers,

All in a day's English class.


The fifth and final line

Summons applause like

A limerick written to shake

The earth under a rose bush miles away

Here in San Juan; we students had planted

© gillena cox 2023




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CHALLENGE to write a poem in five stanzas of five lines per stanza (quintain)write as a Pentastich Quintain (unregulated rhyme, meter etc)each stanza is one of five ways to your house (real or imaginary)can be literal or metaphorical, measured in time, direction, etc or a mixthe title is your own choice but must begin: “Five…………”include a reference to Hererra’s poem somewhere in your post,  include references to Herrerra’s poem by including the follow words in order in each of my stanzas: 1 yellow hills; 2 canvas door; 3 the earth; 4 desert secrets 5 a name.

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12 comments:

  1. An unexpected and original take on the prompt, Gillena! I used to love getting a new exercise book and writing on the first line of a blank page – still do! I like it that the ‘third line will be poetry, / written with a capital P’.

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  2. Thank you for your appreciation Kim

    Much💛love

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  3. I'm thinking of the earth under the rose bush.

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    1. Thank you for your appreciation Reena

      Much💛love

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  4. I love the way to describe the way in terms of lines on a paper.
    Reminds me of a short story written by Swedish Author August Strindberg
    You can find it here in English Translation http://etthalvtarkpapper.se/category/lasa/engelska-lasa/

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    1. Enjoyed reading 'Half A Sheet of Foolscap' thanks for the link😊
      Happy you dropped by

      Much💛love

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  5. really enjoyed reading the copybook lines till that final flourish of a stanza
    "like
    A limerick written to shake
    The earth under a rose bush miles away
    Here in San Juan; we students had planted"

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    1. Thank you for your appreciation Laura

      Much💛love

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  6. Such a unique response to the prompt, Gillena! I love all the various things written in the copybook. 💙

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    1. Thank you for your appreciation Merril

      Much💛love

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  7. I love your take on the prompt Gillena but most of all I like the small oblique details like the snickering at line four's secrets...

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  8. Thank you for your appreciation Andrew

    Much💛love

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