Friday, January 29, 2016

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SHORT VISIT
Protest peeks through the keyhole
For a view of larger 'why didn't they answer'
Why did't they let me in
See now, no one is about
Wait! is that laughter shelved on the mantelpiece?
I searched and searched a long time for this
See now, there it is
Yet, no one is about
Laughter will warm their hearts, when they return
My footsteps retrace to another pace
Where solitude taps its name on the keyboard
And words toss back and forth like ebb tide
When the song of the ocean soothes the soul.
SHORT VISIT © gillena cox 2016


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Prompt Nights – A Cup of Nostalgia [4]


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31 comments:

  1. Sanaa RizviJanuary 29, 2016 at 6:47 PM

    Oh I love those opening lines, it feels like I am stepping into a portal of an alternate universe. Beautifully expanding! Thank you so much for participating :D


    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  2. Gillena CoxJanuary 29, 2016 at 6:54 PM

    Happy you dropped in Sanaa

    much love...

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  3. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 29, 2016 at 7:48 PM

    This is beautiful, Gillena.

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  4. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJanuary 29, 2016 at 10:33 PM

    Nice one! I liked the unexpected change of feeling, with the laughter, and the further change in withdrawing back to your own place.

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    1. Gillena CoxJanuary 30, 2016 at 12:19 PM

      Thanks for your appreciation Rosemary

      Much love...

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  5. JimJanuary 30, 2016 at 12:05 AM

    I like it, Gillena. Like she picked a bad night to venture to those expected-to-be-fun places. Think I have those when I was single. Sounds like you might know them also.
    ..

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  6. brudbergJanuary 30, 2016 at 2:43 AM

    I can remember those time eavesdropping on my parents at their party.. Wonderful.

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  7. Carol CampbellJanuary 30, 2016 at 8:50 AM

    Very lovely!

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  8. Magaly GuerreroJanuary 30, 2016 at 10:10 AM

    It reads like a marriage between a game and a song. ;-)

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  9. Gillena CoxJanuary 30, 2016 at 12:02 PM

    Thanks for dropping by Magaly

    much love...

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  10. Kerry O'ConnorJanuary 30, 2016 at 12:22 PM

    I like your approach to this prompt, Gillena.

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  11. J.N.T.January 30, 2016 at 6:33 PM

    I love the images your poem conveys. Reminds me of grandpa's room back in the islands. and the sounds of the waves crashing ashore while he writes in his journals alone in his room. beautiful memories this brings. thanks.

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  12. Victoria Ceretto-SlottoJanuary 30, 2016 at 6:40 PM

    And words toss back and forth like ebb tide--I love this. And taking it a step further, sometimes they drag us in like a rip tide! Google wont let me comment with wordpress so here's my link: http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com

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    1. Gillena CoxJanuary 30, 2016 at 7:42 PM

      Thanks for dropping in to read mine Victoria, i will certainly use the link you left to come across and read yours

      much love...

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  13. MargaretJanuary 30, 2016 at 11:21 PM

    "words toss back and forth like ebb tide" Ingenious.

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  14. Jae RoseJanuary 31, 2016 at 8:59 AM

    Solitude tapping it's name on a keyboard - marvellous image - and not necessarily lonely not when we have words to keep us company and make things brighter

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    1. Gillena CoxJanuary 31, 2016 at 4:03 PM

      Thanks for dropping in to read mine Jae

      much love...

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  15. Susie ClevengerJanuary 31, 2016 at 1:58 PM

    This is beautiful. Thank you so much for taking part in the prompt!

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  16. RommyFebruary 2, 2016 at 1:42 PM

    So much restlessness in waiting for the laughter to return. At least there is solace in knowing where it can be found when needed.

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    1. Gillena CoxFebruary 2, 2016 at 5:18 PM

      Thank you for your appreciation Rommy

      Much love...

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  17. Purba chakrabortyFebruary 3, 2016 at 3:14 PM

    I especially loved the concluding lines. They are beautiful :)

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  18. Debi SwimFebruary 5, 2016 at 7:50 AM

    "And words toss back and forth like ebb tide" and "song of the ocean"
    are just beautiful phrases. Lovely poem.

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