from Studio Matters art blog
THE SLEEPY STREET
Within the three o'clock hour,
Framed in the dark before dawn,
The heavy rumble of garbage trucks,
Strays across the canvas of waning night;
Sometimes the voices of men, loading
Bags into the trucks, spill out into the silence;
House dogs remain hushed they know the routine,
Such noises pose no threat to their families,
But then the interlude of quiet,
Dapples once more the sleepy street,
Lulled in pre dawn slumber,
Awaiting the first distant strains of bird songs;
A large lamp like moon may hover,
Depending on the phase of counted days.
© gillena cox
(NON-) Fireblossom Friday: Finding the Right Tone
The challenge: to create a poem, prose poem or piece of microfiction (less than 150 words) with 'no under drawing,' by taking an idea, a place, a person, an event or a mood, and quickly fleshing out a portrait of it in a blur of words. Use language to mass light and dark verbal 'tones' and build up your poem in dashes of description and image. The end result should be something immediate but 'misty' which gets its effect primarily through visualization.
And Also Linking to
Open Link Night #154
I think you've met the challenge wonderfully. You've massed the details of dark and light and sound into the t'ones' of the wee hours.
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This is the night. Well done.
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I've been on that street before. Beautifully rendered.
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Even in the dead of night the street is full of life.
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So much happens while most people are asleep!
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The night is alive while I am sleeping peacefully, smiles ~ Thanks for linking up Gillena ~
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Like all the sounds wandering into your poem! Nicely done!
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You have definitely done exactly as the challenge asked--written a vivid impression of a time and its events in a visual presentation---there is an intimacy in that routine in the darkness, its prosaic reality contrasting with the almost magical darkness of the hour. Thanks for participating!
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Thank you for your appreciation Hedgewitch
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Thank you for your appreciation Hedgewitch
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You put me on that street! Enjoyed.
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I love the use of, "dappled" and the contrast of the sound and silence...beautiful write, Gillena.
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you've elevated the mundane and necessary into art, here, Gillena ~
ReplyDeleteThanks for your appreciation Grapeling
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I agree with grapeling...you have painted mundane with an artist's brush
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Ah the rut.. the routine
ReplyDeleteof garbage routes..
oh.. the sanitation
the clean
a savior
comes..
Longer
Lives
facilitate by
Sanitation
Love.. HanDling
garbage with
Living breath..
yes.. science of
sanitation in play
heals more people
than all doctors
in A world.. a
Dump of prevention
aLways best cure
for ills to come..:)
Thanks for dropping on Kate
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