Sunday, January 11, 2015

Sunday's Mini-challenge: David Huerta


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OPEN AND SHUT SURGES

You open the window to grackle songs
The smooth gaze of velvet stings

You shut the cords of angels eyes
Their flight from irises to engage

You open and shut the dreamers weave
To thread my life through needle bare of bones

Yet fleshed of human emotions
through which my mind surges
© gillena cox



Written in response to
Sunday's Mini-challenge: David Huerta...challenged to write a new poem or prose poem in response to David Huerta's words. Some examples of responses include affirming what the speaker said or using his title or line of verse as a jumping board for your own writing.

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33 comments:

  1. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 11, 2015 at 1:09 PM

    Beautifully done and intriguing:. I love "the dreamer's weave" especially.

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  2. Brian MillerJanuary 11, 2015 at 1:16 PM

    interesting...each little couplet could stand alone but come together to form a greater hold...what we bind and what we loose eh?

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  3. brudbergJanuary 11, 2015 at 1:17 PM

    The needle through bare bones is a stunning image.. Very close yet your own words from David Huerta.

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  4. MaryJanuary 11, 2015 at 1:28 PM

    You have some powerful images here, Gillena...especially 'to thread my life through needle bare of bones.'

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  5. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 1:35 PM

    Thank you for your appreciation SHerry

    much love...

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  6. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 1:37 PM

    Thank you Brian, surely appreciative of your critique

    much love...

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  7. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 1:37 PM

    Thanks Bjorn

    much love...

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  8. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 1:38 PM

    Thank you Mary

    much love...

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  9. Debi SwimJanuary 11, 2015 at 1:55 PM

    You open and shut the dreamers weave
    To thread my life through needle bare of bones..... beautiful

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  10. Kerry O'ConnorJanuary 11, 2015 at 2:07 PM

    Each couplet is beautifully realized, Gillena. This is excellent poetry.

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  11. GraceJanuary 11, 2015 at 2:07 PM

    That third couplet is dazzling ~ I admire how you mimicked Huerta's writing style and infused it with your own ~ Thanks for participating with Real Toads & wishing you happy weekend ~

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  12. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 3:28 PM

    Thank you Debi

    much love...

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  13. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 3:29 PM

    Happy you dropped in Grace

    much love...

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  14. SusanJanuary 11, 2015 at 3:49 PM

    O what a shapeless blob, this boneless flesh! ANd then the magic of thinking gives it eyes, angels, meaning.

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  15. ZQJanuary 11, 2015 at 4:49 PM

    Bravo!
    ZQ

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  16. Old EggJanuary 11, 2015 at 5:23 PM

    This is stunning with each verse having complimentary words such as "window and gaze", "eyes and irises", "weave and needle", then "emotions and mind". I loved it.

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  17. TruedessaJanuary 11, 2015 at 5:28 PM

    The third couplet is my favorite..one can feel the sharpness of opening and shutting the dreamers weave.

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  18. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJanuary 11, 2015 at 5:49 PM

    Lovely words. Lovely images they evoke.

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  19. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 6:14 PM

    Thank you for dropping by Susan

    Much love...

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  20. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 6:15 PM

    Thanks RK

    Much love...

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  21. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 6:16 PM

    Thank you for your appreciation Robin

    Much love...

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  22. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 6:17 PM

    Trudessa thank you for your appreciation

    Much love...

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  23. Gillena CoxJanuary 11, 2015 at 6:18 PM

    Happy you dropped in Rosemary

    Much love...

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  24. Susie ClevengerJanuary 11, 2015 at 7:34 PM

    Beautiful, you captured the feeling and style of Huerta so well.

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  25. AnonymousJanuary 11, 2015 at 9:17 PM

    There's a real intensity here--intellect battling with emotion. Thanks, Gillena. K.

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  26. UnknownJanuary 11, 2015 at 10:18 PM

    "Gaze of velvet stings" painted quite the image for me. I could imagine the nature of a crow (although this image of a bird doesn't appear to be a crow) and contrast that with the actions of a human. Definitely a weird abstraction of sorts.

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  27. Gillena CoxJanuary 12, 2015 at 8:11 AM

    Thank you Susie

    much love...

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  28. Gillena CoxJanuary 13, 2015 at 2:55 AM

    Thank you for your appreciation Manic

    Much love...

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  29. Gillena CoxJanuary 13, 2015 at 2:56 AM

    Thank you for your appreciation Ken

    Much love...

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  30. totomaiJanuary 14, 2015 at 6:28 PM

    this is like a dark painting but as you kept on reading turns to a fairytale of sort.

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  31. Gillena CoxJanuary 14, 2015 at 8:00 PM

    Thanks for your appreciation Totomai

    Much love...

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  32. Sanaa RizviSeptember 20, 2016 at 11:52 AM

    Oh this is so very powerful 💖 especially 'You open and shut the dreamers weave to thread my life through needle bare of bones' sigh.. beautifully executed! 💖

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  33. Gillena CoxSeptember 20, 2016 at 1:47 PM

    💖💖

    Thank you Sanaa

    much love...

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